Erikson,
I like your improv of Komunyakaa's "Facing It," especially how it transitions from fear, to writing, to MLK and his "tap-dancing on the hearts of men", which, for me, evokes images of several talented black dancers. I think the last three lines could use more impact, perhaps by replacing "weakening" with a different word and by inserting a qualifier for "A man" in the last line. Overall, I come away with the feeling of the struggle for expression that reflects the black struggle for freedom, and I hope that's what you intended for the poem. Nicely done!
No comments:
Post a Comment