No Can Do
I can’t do it.
I can’t become—the mother you missed out on.
I can’t replace—the father who fell apart.
I can’t tolerate—the child you choose to remain.
I can’t articulate—the words that garrote your gullet.
I can’t read—the thoughts you thoughtlessly keep.
I can’t imagine—you as a forever friend.
I can’t connote—what ruination you wreak.
I can’t, can’t, CANNOT—continue to compensate for you.
I can’t—tell you what a pleasure it’s been to have this little talk.
I like the repetition throughout the piece; it creates a nice flow, especially adding nice emphasis during the words "CANNOT". That being said, I wonder if the capitalization is necessary, as the dash helps to emphasize the word already. I also liked some of the sounds within the piece, especially "garrote your gullet", as it's simply fun to say. Perhaps adding a little more imagery throughout the work would make it even better. Great job though.
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