Monday, April 11, 2011

Week #12--Response to Christine's Free Write #11

Christine,
This draft about chairs reads pretty cool until the last line, where I get lost. The combination of "mouth remotes" seems too odd. But the best lines are the second verse and "Stools, though backless are paradigms of correct posture." Nice alliteration there and catchy, or 'kitschy' phrasing. Well done!

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